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Hello! What do you think of this story of mine? I am an aspiring novelist. How can I further develop the setting and the characters?

The story is basically this.

There was once a group of 30 muscular strong eccentric introverted males. All of them are physically strong which means each of them can lift very heavy objects.

During the time they were 7 years old up to the time they were 19 years old, this entire group was ruled and commanded by a beautiful eccentric introverted girl. That means the group has 31 members. When all of the males of the group were 17 years old, the beautiful eccentric introverted girl was also 17 years old. All of the 30 males of the group are always the same age as her. Her first name is Abigail. Her other first name is Aya. She is called Abigail Aya.

Ever since Abigail Aya and all the 30 males of the group were 13 years old up to the time they were 19 years old, Abigail was a bit taller than all the 30 males of the group while all of the 30 males of the group had the same height. All the 30 males of the group are not short because Abigail Aya is just really tall. All of the 30 boys have average German height while Abigail Aya is taller than most girls her age.

Aya has long straight dark-brown hair. Her skin color is pale. She is physically fit. She is not fat. Her body is in good shape to the point that her body is attractive and sexy in a feminine way. Her body is slim in a feminine and attractive way but despite this, she is physically strong. Her face is also very beautiful. Aya has good hygiene and often takes baths. She often smells good because she likes using perfume on herself very often. As for all of the 30 males of the group, they do not have smells or scents because they have good hygiene and often take baths.

Abigail Aya is part of the group which means the group has 31 members and Abigail Aya is the leader. Aya is the only female member of the group while the rest of the members are boys. All people in the group are martial artists who are all very skilled in Airsoft, Paintball, and gun marksmanship.

As a martial artist, Abigail Aya practices the HEMA martial art of using the medieval two-handed double-edged knight longsword while all of the 30 boys of the group practice a martial art that uses knives and not swords. Anyways, knives are really the only hand-to-hand combat weapons that all of the 30 boys train in and fight with. The 30 boys mostly use unarmed hand-to-hand combat such as punches, kicks, knee strikes, elbow strikes, grappling, ground fighting, throws, body slams, pushes, joint trappings, body parts(such as fingers and toes) snappings, etc.

As a martial artist, Abigail Aya often carries 1 medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword named Dakan and also 3 other swords whose names are Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer. Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer are modified versions of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword.

Taresi is a single-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword. Taresi's blade is straight.

Saral is a half-single-edged and half-double-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword. Saral's blade is straight.

Atagwer is also a single-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword but Atagwer's blade is curved.

Abigail Aya uses Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer in fights. She ruthlessly kills her enemies by using them.

Abigail Aya also uses wooden versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer in fights when she doesn't want to get lethal but she can make them lethal with enough blunt force trauma.

Also, Abigail Aya carries Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions on her back.

Also, Abigail Aya extremely rarely fights unarmed even in unarmed combat. She only fights by using Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions. She mostly fights lethal and non-lethal by using wooden Dakan, wooden Taresi, wooden Saral, and wooden Atagwer. You would never be able to force Abigail Aya to fight without her swords when it comes to all unarmed combat such as brawls, street fights, fisticuffs, etc. She will laugh at you and tell you that it's your problem to beat her in unarmed combat while she's using her 4 swords(the metal ones or the wooden ones). Because of this, people think that she doesn't fight fair but she doesn't care.

To avoid confusion, Abigail Aya doesn't carry all of the 8 swords together. She either carries Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer or all 4 of their wooden versions so she always has 4 swords on her back and not 8.

In combat, she unloads Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions on her back in a way that 4 swords unload like how a folding fan opens. Basically, she carries a sword holder that can contain 4 swords and this sword holder unloads like a folding fan with the ends of this fan formation being the hilts of the swords.

Whenever she challenges others to fights, be it lethal or non-lethal, Abigail Aya often makes them choose which of the 4 swords(or their wooden versions) she will use against them by saying “Pick a blade”. She is very good at intimidating people and her enemies by saying this line even when she doesn't wanna fight them and just wants to intimidate them. She was notorious in a lot of places for that line.

Because of her tendency to carry 4 swords and also her being extremely formidable and extremely ruthless when it comes to using them, she was called “4 Swords” by many.

One time, a whole bully highschool male team of 44 hockey male bullies tried to pick on a deaf kid in a public nature park so Abigail and her 30 boys stepped in not because she feels bad for the deaf kid but because she hates highschool hockey players for their bullying tendencies.

At that time, Abigail Aya was carrying the lethal metallic versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer. She was ready to kill all of the hockey players with the 4 blades.

She told her 30 introverted boys to not intervene by saying that she will handle all of the hockey players by herself. She then stepped in the bullying of the deaf kid and intimidated the whole highschool hockey team by unloading all of her blades and by saying to the hockey players the line “Pick a blade”.

The 4 blades of Aya unloaded like a folding fan before all of the hockey bullies’ eyes so Abigail Aya was looking like a majestic princess at that time.

The whole hockey team knew who she was. She is a vigilante who is notorious for brutally killing bullies and criminals. This resulted in all of the hockey players running away from her which ended the bullying of the deaf kid as a result.

In another time inside a mall, a highschool cheerleader girl bully began verbally tormenting an orphan girl for being an orphan and then the cheerleader tried to dunk the head of the orphan girl on a toilet in a mall. Of course, Abigail Aya hates bullies very much so she stepped in before the cheerleader can bring the orphan to the bathroom and told the cheerleader the line “Pick a blade” because she was carrying the wooden versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer at that time.

The 4 wooden swords unloaded like a folding fan before the cheerleader's eyes and Abigail Aya was looking amazing at that time while the cheerleader looked terrified.

The cheerleader knew that Abigail Aya beat up thugs brutally and that Abigail Aya is a very skilled hand-to-hand combat fighter.

The cheerleader nervously complained to Aya that it's not fair for Abigail to use a wooden weapon but Aya just laughed at her and told that it's her problem.

The cheerleader responded by choosing wooden Atagwer so Abigail Aya brutally beat up the cheerleader by severely injuring her with wooden Atagwer which sent the cheerleader to the hospital. The cheerleader suffered broken bones which forever prevented her from being a cheerleader. Her face was mutilated by the wooden blades of wooden Atagwer.

Anyways, the image below shows how all of the edges of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer, as well as that of all of their wooden versions look like. The image also shows how Abigail Aya carries her 4 swords or their 4 wooden versions and also shows how she prepares for a fight by saying “Pick a blade”.

4-Swords.png


Like the 30 boys of the group, Abigail Aya can also fight without weapons. It's just that she prefers to fight with the 4 wooden swords most of the time.

Abigail Aya and the 30 eccentric introverted boys also own and sometimes use guns such as AR-15s, FN FNCs, AK-47s, Desert Eagles, .45 caliber handguns, M2 Brownings, M60 machine guns, sniper rifles, etc. against their enemies.

In many fights where Abigail Aya uses the wooden medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword, she most often wears these:

1. Buttoned pure-white blouses with long sleeves. When she wears these blouses, the sleeves of the blouses are often rolled up to the point that her two forearms are the only ones that are exposed.

2. Long skirts whose hem and bottom reach down Abigail Aya's toes. The long skirts can either be a pleated type, a plaid type, or types that have vertical stripes. The vertical striped types have alternating patterns where the patterns are vertical stripes and non-striped patterns. The pleated skirts, the plaid skirts, and the vertical striped skirts have long tied-up belts and also belt loops. The plaid types and the vertical striped types have tied-up belts whose patterns and colors are the same as their corresponding skirts.

3. Pairs of pure-white socks whose lengths and sizes are micro crew.

4. Pairs of black flat shoes.

5. Feminine lightweight blazers.

In all honesty, Abigail Aya wears these listed combinations of clothes above most of the time. She wears these listed combinations of clothes in and out of fights. These listed combinations of clothes are what she wears most of the time while the 30 boys often wear T-shirts, pants, jackets, and sneakers most of the time such as both in and out of fights.

All 31 members of the group are also white. All 31 of the members of the group are German ethnically. The 30 males of the group often protected Aya. It's because she is the princess of their group and all of the boys are her loyal servant warriors. They are very proud to be her loyal protector servants.

All 31 members of the group such as Abigail Aya have been together as a platonic friend group from the age of 7 to the age of 19.

Abigail Aya cares very deeply for all 30 male members of the group. She hates it when others are hurting all of the 30 boys to the point that she brutally attacks the ones who are harming them. She always took care of all the male members of the group when they were sick. She also always cooked delicious meals for all of the 30 boys especially when they had nothing to eat for breakfast, lunch, and dinner. She can cook many delicious recipes for the boys such as delicious meals, gourmet recipes, healthy meals, etc. It's almost like she wants to be a chef. She also baked many delicious desserts for the boys such as cakes, muffins, brownies, etc.

All of the male members of the group protected her from her various enemies such as ******* college frat boys, highschool athletic bullies, criminal gangsters, etc. All of the male members of the group brutally destroyed all of those enemies of hers because the 30 boys were some of the strongest fighters in the places they fought those enemies of hers.
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There was also a time when a stupid promiscuous female model tried to pick a fight with the 30 boys’ princess(Abigail Aya) for no reason so one male member of the eccentric introverted group brutally beat up that stupid promiscuous female model. The male member of the group who brutally beat up the stupid model girl is Simeon. This female model was known for cheating on her rich handsome boyfriends.

All of the 30 males of the eccentric introverted group were very loyal to their princess. The 30 boys often listen to her commands. The 30 boys were like her loyal soldiers who were willing to die for her. The 30 boys often call her the titles “Princess”, “Baroness”, and “My Lady”. while she calls the 30 boys “My Knights” and if she is calling only one of the boys, she calls him “My Knight”.
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By the way, all of the males of the eccentric introverted group have never been boyfriends or husbands to their princess because the 30 boys didn't want to. All of the males within the eccentric introverted group also never kissed or had sex with their princess because they didn't want to. She was only a platonic friend to all of the males of their group and the 30 boys love it that way. It's because the 30 boys respect her very much as their princess.

Currently, Abigail Aya and all 30 male members of the group are virgins and have never been in romantic relationships. Abigail Aya never had boyfriends or husbands while all of the male members of the group never had girlfriends or wives. Abigail Aya is not lesbian or bisexual because she is a straight female while all male members of the group are not gay or bisexual because all male members of the group are straight males. Abigail Aya and all male members of the group never engaged in promiscuity. Abigail Aya and all male members of the group hate promiscuity concepts such as casual sex, casual hook-ups, friends with benefits relationships, extramarital sex, etc. Abigail Aya is chaste. She is very dignified.

Compared to Abigail Aya, all of the male members of the group are muscular and bulky while Aya's body is physically fit in an attractive and feminine way. She is not fat. She is not muscular. Her body is slim in a feminine and attractive way but despite this, she is physically strong. She can lift very heavy objects on her own.

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Again, the 30 eccentric introverted boys’ princess is a bit taller than all of the 30 boys. All members of the group are brave ferocious martial artists but Abigail Aya is the best fighter of the group. Abigail Aya is the most skilled martial artist of the whole introverted eccentric group.

By the way, these are all the male members of the group:

1. Uriel

2. Conrad

3. John

4. Aidan

5. Siegfried

6. Simeon

7. Reginald

8. Val

9. Vernon

10. Wilhelm

11. Zechariah

12. Andrew

13. Luke

14. Raphael

15. Jerome

16. Elias

17. James

18. Ambrose

19. Roderick

20. Nathan

21. Randolph

22. Gerard

23. Peter

24. Raymond

25. Gregory

26. Conan

27. Leonard

28. Wilfred

29. Geoffrey

30. Matthew
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Again, Abigail Aya is a bit taller than all 30 male members of the eccentric introverted group while all of the 30 male members of the group have the same height. All 30 males of the group are not short because Abigail Aya is just really tall. All of the male members of the group are average while Abigail Aya is taller than most girls her age.

Again, Aya is also the strongest fighter of the eccentric introvert group.

The best friend group of 30 eccentric introverted males and their eccentric introverted girl leader(Abigail Aya) are actually troubled individuals who fought many bullies in school and are also treated as outcasts by society.

But the eccentric introverted best friend group never cared that the world ostracized them because the best friend group are introverted and eccentric.

Most police forces, most militaries, and most intelligence agencies all over the world such as the CIA, the DEA, the FBI, the US military, Mossad, the MI6, etc. consider the eccentric introverted best friend group as extremely violent.

The eccentric introverted best friend group are very skilled in the following:

1. Martial arts
2. Art such as painting(painting realistic human faces, etc.), drawing(drawing realistic human faces, etc.), digital illustration, etc.
3. Making music
4. Singing
5. Playing musical instruments
6. Airsoft
7. Paintball
8. Gun marksmanship

The 31 eccentric introverts are vigilantes who vowed to themselves that they will forever hunt down and brutally kill bullies, gangbangers, and street gangs such as the Crips, the Bloods, the Latin Kings, the Sureños, etc. The ways the 31 eccentric introverts kill bullies and gangsters are diverse such as by skinning them alive, burning them alive, impaling them Vlad The Impaler style, cutting them alive by using chainsaws, etc. This is why the CIA, American cops, Mossad, and the MI6 consider the 31 eccentric introverts as nothing but violent psychos.

Many civilian people are scared of the 31 eccentric introverts and are wondering why the 31 eccentric introverts are such violent individuals that brutally kill bad people. The reason why the 31 eccentric introverts are very violent is because of the bullying that they fought against. The bullying that the 31 eccentric introverts faced from bullies are a diverse collection of brutal evil intentions such as brutally beating up someone, putting someone in a coma, violent extortion, breaking someone's personal important belongings, etc. In response to this, the 31 eccentric introverts fought back against and brutally killed all of their bullies. As a result, many people feared the 31 eccentric introverts. 101 of the bullies were even skinned alive by the 31 eccentric introverts. The 31 eccentric introverts killed 431 bullies. One of the reasons why the 31 eccentric introverts brutally killed their bullies is because 7 of the bullies killed some parents of 3 male members of the eccentric introverted best group.

The CIA and the FBI consider the 31 eccentric introverts as violent sociopaths.

Whatever the case is, the eccentric introverted best friend group is considered by many to be violent people.

So what do you think of my story?
 
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Hello! What do you think of this story of mine? I am an aspiring novelist. How can I further develop the setting and the characters?

The story is basically this.

There was once a group of 30 muscular strong eccentric introverted males. All of them are physically strong which means each of them can lift very heavy objects.

During the time they were 7 years old up to the time they were 19 years old, this entire group was ruled and commanded by a beautiful eccentric introverted girl. That means the group has 31 members. When all of the males of the group were 17 years old, the beautiful eccentric introverted girl was also 17 years old. All of the 30 males of the group are always the same age as her. Her first name is Abigail. Her other first name is Aya. She is called Abigail Aya.

Ever since Abigail Aya and all the 30 males of the group were 13 years old up to the time they were 19 years old, Abigail was a bit taller than all the 30 males of the group while all of the 30 males of the group had the same height. All the 30 males of the group are not short because Abigail Aya is just really tall. All of the 30 boys have average German height while Abigail Aya is taller than most girls her age.

Aya has long straight dark-brown hair. Her skin color is pale. She is physically fit. She is not fat. Her body is in good shape to the point that her body is attractive and sexy in a feminine way. Her body is slim in a feminine and attractive way but despite this, she is physically strong. Her face is also very beautiful. Aya has good hygiene and often takes baths. She often smells good because she likes using perfume on herself very often. As for all of the 30 males of the group, they do not have smells or scents because they have good hygiene and often take baths.

Abigail Aya is part of the group which means the group has 31 members and Abigail Aya is the leader. Aya is the only female member of the group while the rest of the members are boys. All people in the group are martial artists who are all very skilled in Airsoft, Paintball, and gun marksmanship.

As a martial artist, Abigail Aya practices the HEMA martial art of using the medieval two-handed double-edged knight longsword while all of the 30 boys of the group practice a martial art that uses knives and not swords. Anyways, knives are really the only hand-to-hand combat weapons that all of the 30 boys train in and fight with. The 30 boys mostly use unarmed hand-to-hand combat such as punches, kicks, knee strikes, elbow strikes, grappling, ground fighting, throws, body slams, pushes, joint trappings, body parts(such as fingers and toes) snappings, etc.

As a martial artist, Abigail Aya often carries 1 medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword named Dakan and also 3 other swords whose names are Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer. Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer are modified versions of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword.

Taresi is a single-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword. Taresi's blade is straight.

Saral is a half-single-edged and half-double-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword. Saral's blade is straight.

Atagwer is also a single-edged version of a medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword but Atagwer's blade is curved.

Abigail Aya uses Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer in fights. She ruthlessly kills her enemies by using them.

Abigail Aya also uses wooden versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer in fights when she doesn't want to get lethal but she can make them lethal with enough blunt force trauma.

Also, Abigail Aya carries Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions on her back.

Also, Abigail Aya extremely rarely fights unarmed even in unarmed combat. She only fights by using Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions. She mostly fights lethal and non-lethal by using wooden Dakan, wooden Taresi, wooden Saral, and wooden Atagwer. You would never be able to force Abigail Aya to fight without her swords when it comes to all unarmed combat such as brawls, street fights, fisticuffs, etc. She will laugh at you and tell you that it's your problem to beat her in unarmed combat while she's using her 4 swords(the metal ones or the wooden ones). Because of this, people think that she doesn't fight fair but she doesn't care.

To avoid confusion, Abigail Aya doesn't carry all of the 8 swords together. She either carries Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer or all 4 of their wooden versions so she always has 4 swords on her back and not 8.

In combat, she unloads Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer or all of their wooden versions on her back in a way that 4 swords unload like how a folding fan opens. Basically, she carries a sword holder that can contain 4 swords and this sword holder unloads like a folding fan with the ends of this fan formation being the hilts of the swords.

Whenever she challenges others to fights, be it lethal or non-lethal, Abigail Aya often makes them choose which of the 4 swords(or their wooden versions) she will use against them by saying “Pick a blade”. She is very good at intimidating people and her enemies by saying this line even when she doesn't wanna fight them and just wants to intimidate them. She was notorious in a lot of places for that line.

Because of her tendency to carry 4 swords and also her being extremely formidable and extremely ruthless when it comes to using them, she was called “4 Swords” by many.

One time, a whole bully highschool male team of 44 hockey male bullies tried to pick on a deaf kid in a public nature park so Abigail and her 30 boys stepped in not because she feels bad for the deaf kid but because she hates highschool hockey players for their bullying tendencies.

At that time, Abigail Aya was carrying the lethal metallic versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer. She was ready to kill all of the hockey players with the 4 blades.

She told her 30 introverted boys to not intervene by saying that she will handle all of the hockey players by herself. She then stepped in the bullying of the deaf kid and intimidated the whole highschool hockey team by unloading all of her blades and by saying to the hockey players the line “Pick a blade”.

The 4 blades of Aya unloaded like a folding fan before all of the hockey bullies’ eyes so Abigail Aya was looking like a majestic princess at that time.

The whole hockey team knew who she was. She is a vigilante who is notorious for brutally killing bullies and criminals. This resulted in all of the hockey players running away from her which ended the bullying of the deaf kid as a result.

In another time inside a mall, a highschool cheerleader girl bully began verbally tormenting an orphan girl for being an orphan and then the cheerleader tried to dunk the head of the orphan girl on a toilet in a mall. Of course, Abigail Aya hates bullies very much so she stepped in before the cheerleader can bring the orphan to the bathroom and told the cheerleader the line “Pick a blade” because she was carrying the wooden versions of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, and Atagwer at that time.

The 4 wooden swords unloaded like a folding fan before the cheerleader's eyes and Abigail Aya was looking amazing at that time while the cheerleader looked terrified.

The cheerleader knew that Abigail Aya beat up thugs brutally and that Abigail Aya is a very skilled hand-to-hand combat fighter.

The cheerleader nervously complained to Aya that it's not fair for Abigail to use a wooden weapon but Aya just laughed at her and told that it's her problem.

The cheerleader responded by choosing wooden Atagwer so Abigail Aya brutally beat up the cheerleader by severely injuring her with wooden Atagwer which sent the cheerleader to the hospital. The cheerleader suffered broken bones which forever prevented her from being a cheerleader. Her face was mutilated by the wooden blades of wooden Atagwer.

Anyways, the image below shows how all of the edges of Dakan, Taresi, Saral, Atagwer, as well as that of all of their wooden versions look like. The image also shows how Abigail Aya carries her 4 swords or their 4 wooden versions and also shows how she prepares for a fight by saying “Pick a blade”.

4-Swords.png


Like the 30 boys of the group, Abigail Aya can also fight without weapons. It's just that she prefers to fight with the 4 wooden swords most of the time.

Abigail Aya and the 30 eccentric introverted boys also own and sometimes use guns such as AR-15s, FN FNCs, AK-47s, Desert Eagles, .45 caliber handguns, M2 Brownings, M60 machine guns, sniper rifles, etc. against their enemies.

In many fights where Abigail Aya uses the wooden medieval German two-handed double-edged knight longsword, she most often wears these:

1. Buttoned pure-white blouses with long sleeves. When she wears these blouses, the sleeves of the blouses are often rolled up to the point that her two forearms are the only ones that are exposed.

2. Long skirts whose hem and bottom reach down Abigail Aya's toes. The long skirts can either be a pleated type, a plaid type, or types that have vertical stripes. The vertical striped types have alternating patterns where the patterns are vertical stripes and non-striped patterns. The pleated skirts, the plaid skirts, and the vertical striped skirts have long tied-up belts and also belt loops. The plaid types and the vertical striped types have tied-up belts whose patterns and colors are the same as their corresponding skirts.

3. Pairs of pure-white socks whose lengths and sizes are micro crew.

4. Pairs of black flat shoes.

5. Feminine lightweight blazers.

In all honesty, Abigail Aya wears these listed combinations of clothes above most of the time. She wears these listed combinations of clothes in and out of fights. These listed combinations of clothes are what she wears most of the time while the 30 boys often wear T-shirts, pants, jackets, and sneakers most of the time such as both in and out of fights.

All 31 members of the group are also white. All 31 of the members of the group are German ethnically. The 30 males of the group often protected Aya. It's because she is the princess of their group and all of the boys are her loyal servant warriors. They are very proud to be her loyal protector servants.

All 31 members of the group such as Abigail Aya have been together as a platonic friend group from the age of 7 to the age of 19.

Abigail Aya cares very deeply for all 30 male members of the group. She hates it when others are hurting all of the 30 boys to the point that she brutally attacks the ones who are harming them. She always took care of all the male members of the group when they were sick. She also always cooked delicious meals for all of the 30 boys especially when they had nothing to eat for breakfast, lunch, and dinner. She can cook many delicious recipes for the boys such as delicious meals, gourmet recipes, healthy meals, etc. It's almost like she wants to be a chef. She also baked many delicious desserts for the boys such as cakes, muffins, brownies, etc.

All of the male members of the group protected her from her various enemies such as ******* college frat boys, highschool athletic bullies, criminal gangsters, etc. All of the male members of the group brutally destroyed all of those enemies of hers because the 30 boys were some of the strongest fighters in the places they fought those enemies of hers.
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There was also a time when a stupid promiscuous female model tried to pick a fight with the 30 boys’ princess(Abigail Aya) for no reason so one male member of the eccentric introverted group brutally beat up that stupid promiscuous female model. The male member of the group who brutally beat up the stupid model girl is Simeon. This female model was known for cheating on her rich handsome boyfriends.

All of the 30 males of the eccentric introverted group were very loyal to their princess. The 30 boys often listen to her commands. The 30 boys were like her loyal soldiers who were willing to die for her. The 30 boys often call her the titles “Princess”, “Baroness”, and “My Lady”. while she calls the 30 boys “My Knights” and if she is calling only one of the boys, she calls him “My Knight”.
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By the way, all of the males of the eccentric introverted group have never been boyfriends or husbands to their princess because the 30 boys didn't want to. All of the males within the eccentric introverted group also never kissed or had sex with their princess because they didn't want to. She was only a platonic friend to all of the males of their group and the 30 boys love it that way. It's because the 30 boys respect her very much as their princess.

Currently, Abigail Aya and all 30 male members of the group are virgins and have never been in romantic relationships. Abigail Aya never had boyfriends or husbands while all of the male members of the group never had girlfriends or wives. Abigail Aya is not lesbian or bisexual because she is a straight female while all male members of the group are not gay or bisexual because all male members of the group are straight males. Abigail Aya and all male members of the group never engaged in promiscuity. Abigail Aya and all male members of the group hate promiscuity concepts such as casual sex, casual hook-ups, friends with benefits relationships, extramarital sex, etc. Abigail Aya is chaste. She is very dignified.

Compared to Abigail Aya, all of the male members of the group are muscular and bulky while Aya's body is physically fit in an attractive and feminine way. She is not fat. She is not muscular. Her body is slim in a feminine and attractive way but despite this, she is physically strong. She can lift very heavy objects on her own.

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Again, the 30 eccentric introverted boys’ princess is a bit taller than all of the 30 boys. All members of the group are brave ferocious martial artists but Abigail Aya is the best fighter of the group. Abigail Aya is the most skilled martial artist of the whole introverted eccentric group.

By the way, these are all the male members of the group:

1. Uriel

2. Conrad

3. John

4. Aidan

5. Siegfried

6. Simeon

7. Reginald

8. Val

9. Vernon

10. Wilhelm

11. Zechariah

12. Andrew

13. Luke

14. Raphael

15. Jerome

16. Elias

17. James

18. Ambrose

19. Roderick

20. Nathan

21. Randolph

22. Gerard

23. Peter

24. Raymond

25. Gregory

26. Conan

27. Leonard

28. Wilfred

29. Geoffrey

30. Matthew
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Again, Abigail Aya is a bit taller than all 30 male members of the eccentric introverted group while all of the 30 male members of the group have the same height. All 30 males of the group are not short because Abigail Aya is just really tall. All of the male members of the group are average while Abigail Aya is taller than most girls her age.

Again, Aya is also the strongest fighter of the eccentric introvert group.

The best friend group of 30 eccentric introverted males and their eccentric introverted girl leader(Abigail Aya) are actually troubled individuals who fought many bullies in school and are also treated as outcasts by society.

But the eccentric introverted best friend group never cared that the world ostracized them because the best friend group are introverted and eccentric.

Most police forces, most militaries, and most intelligence agencies all over the world such as the CIA, the DEA, the FBI, the US military, Mossad, the MI6, etc. consider the eccentric introverted best friend group as extremely violent.

The eccentric introverted best friend group are very skilled in the following:

1. Martial arts
2. Art such as painting(painting realistic human faces, etc.), drawing(drawing realistic human faces, etc.), digital illustration, etc.
3. Making music
4. Singing
5. Playing musical instruments
6. Airsoft
7. Paintball
8. Gun marksmanship

The 31 eccentric introverts are vigilantes who vowed to themselves that they will forever hunt down and brutally kill bullies, gangbangers, and street gangs such as the Crips, the Bloods, the Latin Kings, the Sureños, etc. The ways the 31 eccentric introverts kill bullies and gangsters are diverse such as by skinning them alive, burning them alive, impaling them Vlad The Impaler style, cutting them alive by using chainsaws, etc. This is why the CIA, American cops, Mossad, and the MI6 consider the 31 eccentric introverts as nothing but violent psychos.

Many civilian people are scared of the 31 eccentric introverts and are wondering why the 31 eccentric introverts are such violent individuals that brutally kill bad people. The reason why the 31 eccentric introverts are very violent is because of the bullying that they fought against. The bullying that the 31 eccentric introverts faced from bullies are a diverse collection of brutal evil intentions such as brutally beating up someone, putting someone in a coma, violent extortion, breaking someone's personal important belongings, etc. In response to this, the 31 eccentric introverts fought back against and brutally killed all of their bullies. As a result, many people feared the 31 eccentric introverts. 101 of the bullies were even skinned alive by the 31 eccentric introverts. The 31 eccentric introverts killed 431 bullies. One of the reasons why the 31 eccentric introverts brutally killed their bullies is because 7 of the bullies killed some parents of 3 male members of the eccentric introverted best group.

The CIA and the FBI consider the 31 eccentric introverts as violent sociopaths.

Whatever the case is, the eccentric introverted best friend group is considered by many to be violent people.

So what do you think of my story?

I just read what you wrote. Allow me a few questions.

Are you writing this for yourself? Or with the hope of getting it published?

Is this Fantasy Adventure or more of an action novel?
 
I just read what you wrote. Allow me a few questions.

Are you writing this for yourself? Or with the hope of getting it published?

Is this Fantasy Adventure or more of an action novel?
It is an action adventure thriller novel.

What do you think of the characters especially their outfits, battle skills, and weapons?

Overall, what do you think of the story?
 
It is an action adventure thriller novel.

What do you think of the characters especially their outfits, battle skills, and weapons?

Overall, what do you think of the story?

It’s not a story yet, just some ideas.
Again, is this for yourself or to hopefully get published?

A couple of things you should consider…

One of the rules of writing is - Less is more. What you posted could and should be condensed into a quarter of what you wrote.

There’s far too many characters. You should pick two or three that are the leads. The rest should be supporting characters or eliminated.

What do you like to read? A writer, any writer, when they’re not writing - should be reading.
What do you like to read?

Where will the story take place? What country, what world, what setting, what era?

You need to develop patience. You don’t have any yet. I’m not trying to take a shot at you, just trying to help. A writer needs as much patience as a Martial Artist does.
 
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