Iron them flat and scent them…you need all the help you can get.But not so many the flow of the essay is interrupted. Use large denominations.
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Iron them flat and scent them…you need all the help you can get.But not so many the flow of the essay is interrupted. Use large denominations.
I find that using grammarly gets rid of a large wordcount whenever I have too much. Focuses on all the extra stuff and awkward phrasing, which is normally longer than using correct grammar.Great stuff! Editing down is usually straightforward: remove superfluous words such adjectives, tautologies and the really obscene swear words.
For the most part, I don't believe the premise either. The article seems to deal with the different "goals" of budo vs sport being compatible. Only one sentence is devoted to the differences in execution, and this is described as a qualified "moot" point dependent on not affecting the core of the art.Here’s one of mine that I wrote for a competition. I don’t even believe the premise, but for the purposes of the prize money (£50)
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Not really.For the most part, I don't believe the premise either. The article seems to deal with the different "goals" of budo vs sport being compatible. Only one sentence is devoted to the differences in execution, and this is described as a qualified "moot" point dependent on not affecting the core of the art.
The point is that this difference in goals will invariably affect the execution (and thus the effectiveness in the original martial intent) and find its way into the "grass root training." When a school's overriding focus is sport, this will be the natural result. After all, one trains in something the way one plans to use it.
Take iai as an example. Partner training with live blades can be a little dangerous, so wooden bokken were used. Later, the sport of kendo evolved with bokken being replaced with slats of split bamboo. While this sport develops a number of valuable skills, the method of execution greatly changed. The very essence of iai, cutting, is largely replaced with touching. Kendo is a different animal, an entirely different (though related) art from kenjustsu or iai.
In fact, your own sentence I quoted, proves this point. You wrote with winning the prize in mind (much like the goal in sport) and this compromised your execution of the essay to be something you don't even support. So, the goal of writing for "sport" is not complimentary to the goal (of most essays) of sincerely expressing your true thoughts, "budo".
IMO, it's fine to engage in sport MA or insincere commercial "sport" writing, as long as one realizes the difference between these and the ideal intent. So, this is not a criticism of the article, just a contribution to the "moot" point it brought up.
Wasn't a critique at all - nothing wrong with the article. I even agreed with your not buying the premise.Thank you for the unsolicited critique
I tried to avoid your getting any negative vibes from my post. Was not my intention. Just using it to expand on a related idea.this is not a criticism of the article, just a contribution to the "moot" point it brought up.
I don't think I made that argument at all.Not really.
It is dishonest to argue that sport doesn't train fighting because it is not fighting.
Regarding sport version of TMA - both these phrases are generally true. And IMO, sport fighting is fighting, but usually modified as it has been repurposed to some degree, including conforming to a rule set. I don't think anyone would deny this.develops a number of valuable skills, the method of execution greatly changed.
I spontanously draw the parallell between MA and sports, and science vs engineering. They are also related, yet have different goals and have differences in methodology or execution. The "tools" used in sports, originate from and was developed by MA. Just like in engineering.For the most part, I don't believe the premise either. The article seems to deal with the different "goals" of budo vs sport being compatible. Only one sentence is devoted to the differences in execution, and this is described as a qualified "moot" point dependent on not affecting the core of the art.
The point is that this difference in goals will invariably affect the execution (and thus the effectiveness in the original martial intent) and find its way into the "grass root training." When a school's overriding focus is sport, this will be the natural result. After all, one trains in something the way one plans to use it.
Dude! I really enjoyed the article. And even if you don't believe the premise, I thought you make very valid points. I feel they can coexist, and often when placed in a "sporting" context it can serve to uplift and inspire others.Here’s one of mine that I wrote for a competition. I don’t even believe the premise, but for the purposes of the prize money (£50)
Are Budo and Sports Complimentary? | Tozando
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